Hayley Rathburn’s Blog

If I had the opportunity to redo my timed write on the poem entitled “Evening Hawk”, there are several things I would change. First of all, I would read the poem itself much more carefully and pay more attention to the pronouns being used. For example, in the fourth stanza the prounoun “he” is used, and it is referring to the hawk. But, for some reason I thought that it could possibly be alluding to God or some higher power. Because of that, I completely misread the poem and the theme I came up with was not correct. So, I would change the entire approach of my essay to fit the correct theme, that of the constant passage of time and the puniness of humans.

I thought the concrete details I used were good, but I would make the analysis of theme more complete and clear. There were strong points of my analysis, but I would change the inconsistency of that strength by tying in more about how the language directly shows the theme, mood, and scene. Also, my paragraphs weren’t as well-organized as they could have been. So, I would include more structure by adding clear topic and concluding sentences to each paragraph.